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Posted 20 May 2009 - 07:32 PM

Ok so I had a short story due today in my English class. It could be about what ever we wanted will one rule It had to have a Romeo and Juliet-ish theme. So my story is about a girl who was born in 1767. She was changed into a vampire when a stable boy raped and beat her almost to death and she was found by Sebastian Oliver Land. He had been recently changed when he was trampled by a team of horses. THey are living in present time and the story is that everone has 2 soul mates a best friend and a true love. They live with Benjamin ? Parker, Ben's wife and his best friend Maxwell Christopher Herman.
Sebastian has also found his best friend soulmate Nathaniel Jacob Christian. All of the kids are supposed to be adopted by Ben and his wife. A way to see a vampire is they have gray eyes and are pale. The older they are the longer they can stay in direct sunlight and as long as they have al their skin covered all vampires can stand as long as they want in nondirect sunlight.

? ? James-Parker- She has gone through the names Odette,Crimson and Dorthea. She is a little cynical and very musical. Sorta on the line between musical genius and insanity. She doen't get along very well with people who are not musicians. She Than and Seb are her best friends and she loves them like her real brothers and they act like it. She loves math and has almost every math degree that there is. She likes to be alone and does want to be bothered so her room is at the top of the house. THe only way to get to it is by going up the back stairs and then climbing up a ladder. She hates moving but realizes that it is nessecary. Is extermely sarcastic. Waist-Long red hair and grey eyes.

Benjamin ? Parker- I only need a middle name. He is the father figure. He loves to learn and is a physic and chemistry are his favorite things to study. He also has a medical degree and is a surgeon, prediatrican, and cancer specialist. He is good hearted but when he is away from his wife or Max he gets mood swings that are wider than the Atlantic. Is a people person and loves knew places. He and main girl love each other but fight quite often because of differences. Mousy brown hair that is short

? ? Parker- SHe is the mother figure altought she never wanted to be a mother. She is very sarcastic and has an odd sense of humor. She is the only one of the family without a degree. In her life she was a flapper in the 1920's when she was changed. She was alcoholic and smoked like a fiend. She truly loves Ben, Seb and Than. But her and Max are constantly fighting. White blonde hair that is cut in a bob

Aerilyn ? Ciprano- She is main girl's best friend soulmate and is Seb's love. She is a lot like main girl but is more of a people person. She loves music and it is her life. She has bright green eyes and Black hair to her mid-back

? ? August- Main girl's bf. He is musical but very athletic not at all the type of guy she has been looking for. He loves people and being in the spotlight. He has shaggy dark brown hair and crystal blue eyes.

Sorry that it's alot. I just can't find names that fit them but I'm sure that you lovely ladies and gentlemen can help me find the perfect names!

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Posted 25 May 2009 - 10:04 AM

Hello Any one? Please!

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Posted 25 May 2009 - 08:55 PM

I personally LOVED Odette. And so far, when ever I think of your character, it's the only name that comes to mind!

Benjamin Rhys
Benjamin Liam
Benjamin Chase

Mother firgure:
Arwen
Jane
Barbara

Nicholas August
Matthew August


Aerilyn Lee Ciprano
Aerilyn Sage Ciprano
Aerilyn Mae Ciprano


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Posted 26 May 2009 - 10:17 AM

Thanks Evy!

I know when I'm writing I keep calling her Odette so I think that I'm going to keep it!

I really like Benjamin Rhys WDYT?

I still can't find the right name for the mother

Her boyfriend needs a very trendy name that contrasts with the other names WDYT of Zane?

I'm really leaning towards Aralyn Sofia Ciprano

Thanks so much!

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Posted 26 May 2009 - 11:34 AM

Loving Odette! Benjamin Rhys sounds GREAT! Zane is indeed very trendy, so thumbs up on that one. And Aralyn Sofia Ciprano sounds amazing.

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Posted 26 May 2009 - 01:31 PM

Thanks so much Zayda!

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Posted 27 May 2009 - 03:03 PM

I know when I'm writing I keep calling her Odette so I think that I'm going to keep it!--Odette Hermione

I really like Benjamin Rhys WDYT?--For some reason, although I cannot explain, this does not feel fatherly to me. Rhys is to common right now, and I just see Benjamin as a child. If it works for you, though, go for it.
Other suggestions:
Michael
Marc
Matthew
Manning
Alan/Allen/Allan/Alen
Robert


I still can't find the right name for the mother
Suggestions:
Helen
Kricket/Cricket
Kathy*
Kim
Joan
Willa

Her boyfriend needs a very trendy name that contrasts with the other names WDYT of Zane?
I never really cared for Zane. Perhaps:
Santi
Kohen/Cohen
Rowan
Regie
idk...maybe Zane is better...teehee

I'm really leaning towards Aralyn Sofia Ciprano
Arilyn Sofia Ciprano is lovely, but use an I.


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Posted 27 May 2009 - 03:15 PM

Thanks Maggie!
I'm changing it to Benjamin Matthew.
I really like Helena Catherine for the mother! I have no idea where I came up with Catherine but I like the way it sounds!

Ok so far I have Odette Hermione, Sebastian Oliver nn. Seb, Nathaniel Jacob nn. Than, Maxwell Christopher nn. Max, Benjamin Matthew nn. Ben, Helena Catherine nn. Lena, Arilyn Sofia nn. Ari, and Zane Travis!

Thanks so much Zayda and Maggie!

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Posted 27 May 2009 - 03:22 PM

That sounds good! My only suggestion, is make Helena's nn Helen, b/c Lena sounds soft, feminine and sweet, not smoker and stuff.




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